I really think this is a good haiku. I think that you have some great sounds, and it was very easy to understand that you were walking in the snow.
I actually really enjoy the textures that run throughout the piece, but i wish that it would take me more on a journey. Maybe add some more voice or something that would indicate a sort of place.
I really think this is a good haiku. I think that you have some great sounds, and it was very easy to understand that you were walking in the snow.
ReplyDeleteI actually really enjoy the textures that run throughout the piece, but i wish that it would take me more on a journey. Maybe add some more voice or something that would indicate a sort of place.
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